My free time activity
In my free time I do many things in the week, but I´m going to talk about three specific activities what I most like. Firstly what I most like to do is cooking, something that I really enjoy to do is that, I love to do a nice breakfast, sometimes something easy like a field eggs with fruits and maybe a “mate” drink and other times something like pancakes. And I like to do a dinner like a spaghetti or beans (porotos).
Other thing that I like to do is watching a movie, I enjoy this very much specially because is something that I can do along or with other people. I love the science fiction movies, the adventure movies and many others genders. Many times I come back tired at home and it´s nice to watch a movie.
Finally I like to do physical exercise, I think it´s good for the body and health do this, so two or three time in the week I run or swimming or I try to do something like this and I really enjoy it.
Well for all that I explained I can say this are the activities that I most like to do in my free time.
Marcos,
ResponderEliminarTS: In my free time I do many things in the week, but I´m going to talk about three specific activities what I most like.
A TOPIC SENTENCE NEEDS A TOPIC + A CONTROLLING IDEA. THEY MUST BE VERY CLEAR. YOU SHOULD HAVE WRITTEN: "THERE ARE THREE THINGS THAT I LIKE DOING IN MY FREE TIME: COOKING, WATCHING MOVIES AND EXERCISING", WHERE THE TOPIC IS "COOKING, WATCHING MOVIES AND EXERCISING" AND THE CONTROLLING IDEA IS THAT THEY ARE YOUR FAVOURITE FREE TIME ACTIVITIES.
SS1: Firstly what I [most] like to do THE MOST is cooking, something that I really enjoy to do is that,
EXP: I love to [do] MAKE a nice breakfast, sometimes something easy like a [field eggs???] with fruits and maybe a “mate” drink and other times something like pancakes.
EXP 2: And I like to [do] MAKE a dinner like a spaghetti or beans [(porotos)UNNNECESARY. WE UNDERSTAND].
SS2: ANOther thing that I like to do is watching a movie,
EXP.:I enjoy this very much Especially because IT is (NEVER OMIT THE SUBJECT)something that I can do alonE[g] or with other people.
EX:I love [the] science fiction movies, [the] adventure movies and many other[s] genders.
EX.:Many times I come back HOME tired at home and it´s nice to watch a movie.
SS3: Finally I like to do physical exercise, I think it´s good for the body and health do this, so two or three timeS [in]A [the] week I run or swim[ming] or I try to do something like this and I really enjoy it.
Well [for all that I explained] I can say [this] THESE are the activities that I [most] like to do THE MOST in my free time.
Marcos,
Your structure is fine, just pay attention to the composition of right topic sentences. Pay attention to your grammar and lexis and then you can improve your writing.