MY BEST HOLIDAYS
Hello dear
friends
Today I
will like to talk about my best holidays I ever have, this is: My holiday in
Linares Mountain. It was amazing.
Two years
ago I and my cousin decided to go to Achibueno Lake. This travel it was a real
adventure because at first we don´t know very well how to get there, second to
get there we must to walk for three days to footpath and many time we lost this
and we must to camping in the different part that we found.
Second thing it was that I could share different with my cousins, this because we
was in a beautiful but hard place, so we had some problems. How we had to be
together all the time, when we walk, when we eat, when we sleep, etc., so sometimes
we discussed among us, but we could solve the problems and did different thing
very funny like fishing or campfire, so of this travel we get great memories.
Finally the
nature was incredibly. We can saw many different species of trees, fauna and
landscapes. I could see many native species like nothofagus (oaks), Canelos,
Arrayanes, Avellanos, among others. Too we saw rabbits, loros tricachues
(parrots) and many of other beautiful birds. And we saw a beautiful geomorphology
with great mountains, summit and finally the lake, this it was the most beautiful,
although the water was very cold.
Well, for
all this this travel it was the best holiday what I never have, I had many
others good and great holidays, but this it was so beautiful that win to all
others.
Hello Marcos, great holidays but I'm going to check the post.
ResponderEliminarReading this, i found 2 errors, one of redaction (I guess) and a gramatic.
In the sentence "Other thing it was that we could share with my cousin different like all time" I don't understand anything, and the second error is "Finally the nature was incrediblY" it should be incredible.
See you in class Marcos
hi Marcos, i will like to visit Linares someday, it looks very nice
ResponderEliminari found a mistake in this sentence: "decide to go to Achibueno Lak", you wrote "decide", but you should have written "decided", in past.
see you
Today I will like to talk about my best holidays I ever have, this is:] DO NOT ANNOUNCE: Just say:
ResponderEliminarMy holiday in Linares Mountain. It was amazing.
(MY AMAZING HOLIDAYS IN LINARES MOUNTAIN(S?) (TS)
Two years ago [I and] my cousin AND I decided to go to Achibueno Lake. (SS1)
This (travel it) TRIP was a real adventure because at first we [don´t] DIDN’T know very well how to get there, (EXPLANATION)
secondLY to get there we [must] HAD to walk for three days [to] ON A footpath and many timeS we lost (this) IT and we (must) HAD to camp(ing) in (the) different (part) PLACES that we found.(DESCRIPTION)
Second thing (ANOTHER SECOND THING?) [it] was that I could share different WHAT? with my cousins (1 COUSIN? 2 COUSINS?) (EXPLANATION? UNCLEAR)
, this because we (was) WERE in a beautiful but hard place, so we had some problems. (EXPLANATION)
AS (How) we had to be together all the time, when we walkED, when we (eat) ATE, when we slEPT(eep), etc., so sometimes we (discussed among us) ARGUED, (SS2??)
but we could solve the problems and did different 2) thingS 1)very funny like fishing or campfire, so 2)of this (travel) TRIP 1)we HAVE (get) great memories. (EXPLANATION)
Finally the nature was incrediblE(y). (SS3??)
We [can saw] COULD SEE!!! many different species of trees, fauna and landscapes. I could see many native species like nothofagus (oaks), Canelos, Arrayanes, Avellanos, among others. WE ALSO (Too we) saw rabbits, loros tricachues (parrots) and many of other beautiful birds. And we saw a beautiful geomorphology with great mountains, summitS and finally the lake, [this it??] was the most beautiful, although the water was very cold.
Well, for all this this travel it was the best holiday what I never have, I had many others good and great holidays, but this it was so beautiful that win to all others.
Marcos,
Your edition was really poor, there are so many grammatical mistakes you could have taken the time to correct; your work is clearly not finished. You didn’t pay much attention to the structure indicated in classes either. If you worked more in correcting your mistakes and in the correct structure, your paragraph would be much easier to read.